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I'm trying to get better with rendering. I liked this image at first, but then the composition just fell apart. I almost gave it up, but decided to finish it because any bit of experience will help me.

It's not as powerful and moving as I wanted it to be.

Critiques are always welcome
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~ArcticIceWolf Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
There is a PIIIIGGIIIIEEEEEE! :love:
Reminds me a lot of the movie "Willow"- I grew up with it...
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~MintyGloomcookie Feb 26, 2013  Student Photographer
Actually, I think it would be more moving if the background were reversed. It looks like they are going towards whatever town or dwelling is attached to that windmill. Also, I agree with the 1st post. Adding a bit more space between the front couple and the windmill will hit home the concept that they are leaving their village, not just walking around the corner.

You might even play with colors, which can do a lot towards altering the mood. Look how Tim Burton sets the bleak mood by playing up greys and blues. Also changing the color of her skirt to a deep brown or other dark color would really make the baby pop. It is almost overlooked and lost in the grey of her skirt.

I like the picture, but from what I'm seeing, there is no reason for them to be leaving their home. Did they just get bored? Is there a plague killing the village and these are desperate refugees? You might make the windmill and wall look a bit more run down and forlorn or provide some other reason for the viewer to understand the motivation of the painting. Maybe losing the forest and adding in a plague struck wheat field, all brown and dead, would provide the motivation for these tiny millers.

Just a handful of ideas throw at you, feel free to use whatever sticks.
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~MintyGloomcookie Feb 26, 2013  Student Photographer
Oops, apparently I have my sort set to Newest first. By 1st post, I meant *Thiani's comments about making the windmill look a bit more torn up.
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*Thiani Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I looked at your picture now for a while, trying to find out how you could improve it. Maybe I'm better with seeing weak spots than with painting ;)
You say, it falls apart: Try to remove that wing of the windmill, it is between the couple, divides it apart.
Breaking a wing might add to the desolation of the picture, makes it more quickly obvious than the missing canvas.
A problem of the whole picture might lie in the values. Maybe add some more contrast, even if the 'desolation-look' might suffer, now it looks a bit flat to me.

Hope that helped!
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=jjpeabody Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for taking the time to look at this and provide feedback. I don't usually go back and fix images as I've learned what I can from them. I'll take your observations that you pointed out in this image and add it to my toolbox for future images. Thanks again!
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~LouiseLouisa Feb 2, 2013
Admirable attitude with deciding to finish. I hope you'll get far. :)
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~headland Jan 21, 2013
A little less cuteness to the characters might help with the sadness aspect. Imagine trying to cry about the plight of the seven dwarves as depicted by Disney...

In my opinion, the colors and layout are excellent! What is it you didn't like?
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=jjpeabody Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The characters! Thanks for taking the time for some feedback.
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~Winterkeep Jan 21, 2013
That reminds me the movie Willow !
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=jjpeabody Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh ya, right! I totally can see that.
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